My girlfriend is mean
My girlfriend is sweet
My girlfriend drives me crazy
My girlfriend hardly lets me sleep
My girlfriend is pushy
My girlfriend is mushy
My girlfriend snores
My girlfriend snorts
My girlfriend is mine all the time
My girlfriend is the best all the time
My girlfriend stole my heart from the start
My girlfriend will be mine till…
THE END
Nice repetition. Try to build up from the negative to the positive in tone. Or even do as Shakespeare would do. Build in a couplet at the end that tells why these things don't annoy you, but instead they make you love her. There does seem to be something missing from the end that I will take away from the entire poem. (+10)
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